Chapter Fourteen

“So you’ll call us as soon as you get there?” Damien leaned toward his son as he spoke.

“If I still have reception, sure…”

“And who’s going, again?” Becca chimed in.

“Just some friends from school. Noah, Sam… You’ve met them.”

07-23-15_11-58 PM

Lucas’ father cleared his throat uncertainly. “What about that girl you were telling me about a while back? Is she gonna be there too?”

“No, she… She couldn’t make it.”

“Good.” Becca said seriously. Her husband shot her a look. “Um, I mean… That’s too bad, honey.”

Lucas rolled his eyes, laughing to himself. “Will you guys stop freaking out? I’ll be fine.” He smiled at his nervous parents as he saw Sam’s van pull up outside.

“That’s them.” He said, rising to his feet.

Becca rushed forward to give her son a squeeze. “Be safe. Please.”

07-23-15_11-59 PM

“And have fun.” Damien added, standing as well.

“I will.” Lucas smiled at both of his parents. “Don’t worry.”

07-23-15_12-31 PM

“I don’t know…” Becca muttered nervously to her husband as she watched Lucas step away. “There’ll be girls there… And what if there’s alcohol? Or drugs?”

“He’ll be alright.” Damien assured her. “That’s no worse than any of the stuff we were doing when we were his age… And we turned out just fine. Ow!” He pulled back as his wife smacked him on the arm, though she laughed as she did so.

“Wow, thanks, babe.” She rolled her eyes. “I feel so much better…”

07-23-15_12-31 PM-2


“Hey man, you ready?” A familiar voice called from the kitchen.

Sure, guys, just let yourselves in… Lucas thought, amused as he left the living room to join his friends. Thankfully, his parents knew enough not to follow.

07-23-15_12-36 PM

“Aw man, you guys have no idea how much I need this.” Lucas said with a smile as he greeted his friends. “Feels like I’ve done nothing but work lately.”

“Okay, rule number one of this trip.” Noah’s girlfriend, Camryn cut in. “No talking about work…”

Noah stepped forward with a smile. “Or school.”

“Or parents.” Sam added, laughing.

“Done.” Lucas grinned at his friends. “Let’s go!”

07-23-15_12-40 PM

He grabbed his backpack from the corner and headed outside with his friends, giving one last wave to his parents when the others weren’t looking.

As they reached the curb, Laura peered up toward the sky. “Sun’s going down… If we make good time, we should get there by 9.”

Noah was beaming. “Perfect.

07-23-15_12-45 PM

Lucas threw his bag in the back of the vehicle with the rest of the supplies, feeling happier than he’d felt in a long time. “Let’s do this.” He said excitedly as he hopped in the backseat beside Sam.


With the sun finally setting, Evelyn emerged from her grave. The ghost floated around the side of the house just in time to watch the beaten-up blue van drive away. She could not help the wave of bitterness and jealousy that washed over her at the sight.

Have fun without me… The girl thought sadly.

07-23-15_12-53 PM

She continued watching until the van had rounded the corner and completely vanished from her view. Then, with a soft sigh that went unheard by living ears, she returned to the darkness, alone.

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24 Responses to Chapter Fourteen

  1. Lux Conant says:

    Aww poor Evelyn, I hope her jealousy doesn’t become real after he gets back. I don’t know what will happen there. But why couldn’t he invite her lol No one would have known.

    Lol Becca “good. Um I mean…”
    Wow, TMI from Damien but it looks like Lucas didn’t hear.

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    • CitizenErased14 says:

      That’s a good question (about why he couldn’t invite her!). I feel like it would be helpful to let people know the “rules” about ghosts in my story haha.

      Basically, this is what I imagine to be true about ghosts in the world that Lucas and Evelyn live in:

      1) They can only be seen by people who believe in ghosts, but there are “shades” to this — like, if you’re skeptical but kinda open-minded, maybe you’ll hear a whisper or see a shadow out of the corner of your eye, but you won’t really see them. If you’re a full believer, you’ll see them completely like Lucas sees Evelyn, and if you totally don’t believe (like Lucas’ parents), you see/hear nothing

      2) They can’t “feel” things the way people can. Heat/cold/wet/dry/etc can’t be felt by them. If they touch a person, they can sense that there’s something there, but they can’t “feel” the way a person could feel another person. That’s why it’s hard for Lucas and Evelyn to kiss or touch. I imagine ghosts as being like a bubble — even the tiniest bit too much pressure, and they “pop” (or, in this case, you go through them!)

      3) They can only come out at night. They can leave their graves at sunset and have to return at sunrise. Evelyn spends the daytime sitting in the darkness between the human world and the afterlife (where we saw the Grim Reaper leave her behind in her interlude)

      4) They are bound to their graves — They cannot leave the lot that their grave is on, so Evelyn is stuck in the confines of the house/yard (with a tiny bit of wiggle-room, like the park area behind Lucas’ house. That’s the farthest she can go). The only exception would be when she’s in the darkness, because other ghosts can pass through from time to time (that may come up later… I will say no more XD)

      That sounds so complicated 😛 But those are the “rules” I imagine for Evelyn 🙂

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  2. Lux Conant says:

    So that’s why she had to stay. I had some ideas about it from the chapters and what you’ve mentioned but this makes it clearer.

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  3. ninjapigsims says:

    Haha I love how Becca’s so worried about her son. Such a typical parent response. 🙂

    Poor Evelyn! I want to give her a huge hug. He’ll be back soon. (Also, I like how she has steam actually rising off her!)

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    • CitizenErased14 says:

      Haha yeah, Becca is the stereotypical concerned parent, whereas Damien is a little more laid-back. And poor Evelyn… She just wants to be able to go do things too! Poor thing 😦 (and yeah, I love the steam! I guess all fire-ghosts have it!) Thanks for being a faithful reader 🙂

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      • ninjapigsims says:

        They off-set each other very well. 🙂

        I know right? It must be so difficult to see your significant other go off to have fun without you, leaving you behind. And to gorgeous, green Granite Falls no less!

        I thought it was just creative positioning using the hot tub! I have to test out ghosts more in my game for sure. 🙂

        Aw you’re most welcome! It’s a great story, and super well-written. Thank you for writing it! 🙂

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  4. Jes2G says:

    Well geez, man! We already feel sorry for Evelyn. Way to twist that dagger deeper into her heart lol.

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  5. Oh, poor Evelyn. That last shot of her watching him drive away broke my heart.


  6. lunarokz says:

    Wow. That was a great story. I was about to click on the next chapter and didn’t realize the I had finished.

    It was a pleasure to read. Looking forward to reading your next chapter.

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  7. Wolfy29 says:

    I hope nothing happens between Laura and Lucas with the alcohol and all… poor Evelyn, so sad that she couldn’t go with him and that no one can see her.

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  8. Reblogged this on kitdragonflight and commented:
    God, I feel so bad for Ev!!

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  9. Derubelle says:

    So weird how I went from really excited for Lucas’ trip to very sad for Evelyn 😦

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  10. alienphoenix says:

    Gotta love parents. Always worrying :p

    Also poor Evelyn. I wish she could go as well.

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  11. beckycat1221 says:

    Sad for Evelyn also

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  12. Simslover163 says:

    Yikes, that was surprising! Lucas goes off with this friends and leaves Evelyn? Poor girl! 😦 I feel so bad for her!! Is it going to turn for the worst?

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  13. Enjoyed this chapter, too and hope that Evelyn makes out alright on her own for the weekend. Since I have about 86 chapters to read, I’m just going to click the ‘like’ button so it feels more like reading a book.

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    • CitizenErased14 says:

      Yes, don’t worry about commenting on every chapter! 🙂 Though obviously if you feel compelled to share how you feel about something, feel free to! I appreciate you reading!

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  14. lovesstorms says:

    I loved, loved, loved that last part of this chapter. I mean, the story in the picture itself with your words. Heartbreaking. I just wanted to tell her to follow them. lol

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  15. ARoseInBloom says:

    Ev!!! I love you. Don’t be sad. Poor thing…how could she not be sad? I’d be sad. I am sad, actually. It’s a shame she can’t go 😦

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    • CitizenErased14 says:

      I am cruel 😦 I never actually explicitly go into detail about the “rules” of being a ghost in my “world”, but the basics are…

      1. Ghosts can never leave the lot their grave is on

      2. Ghosts are bound to their grave during daylight hours and can only come to the “mortal plane” at night

      3. Only people who believe in ghosts can see them, but there are shades of this. If you are a skeptic, you might hear a whisper or see a shadow, but you can’t 100% see or hear them 🙂


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